Since this commercial equally offends both males and females alike, I believe that the ad should be allowed to air on television. Generally this claim sounds absurd since it states that a commercial which offends two large groups of people should be allowed to air on the grounds that it offends both groups rather than one group. However, this balancing act is actually quite common justification in today’s society; just look at the television cartoon South Park. But what exactly constitutes crossing the line and how does one balance his ad so it does not cross the line? Interestingly enough, though, finding balance does not necessarily mean that both genders will be made fun of equally. Balancing the humor directed at males and females is vital to not overstepping the line drawn by society though the balance never seems to reflect true equality between the two genders.
The original paragraph reads slightly odd, but for the most part it makes sense. My topic sentences seem to require a little expansion here and there so that they better relate back to the thesis. Also for my second paragraph I took the first and second sentences because the first is more of a transition while the second gives the topic of the paragraph. I suppose I could find a way to mash them together, but that would make the sentence too long for my liking.
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